Line basketball
Skateboarding was canceled so Room7 decided to invite Room 8 to play line basketball.
It was quite a sunny day so I already knew I was going to get hot like a pepper. Once we were there Miss Morrison and Miss Ashley announced, “We are going to play Line basketball and do a recount. But remember humble winners gracious losers”.
As the game was starting the teachers thought and gasped “ We want it girl, boy, girl, boy” “AWW” I thought to myself. So the lines were ready, the people were ready, as Miss Shouted out “5!!!” which was amazing because I was the fourth person.
The game then ended after about 10 - 15 minutes and the score was
3 - 1 for us so we won!!!, but then we remembered HUMBLE WINNERS, GRACIOUS LOSERS, but the problem was they weren't gracious losers, because when we went to have a friendly handshake they were slapping like the HULK.
In conclusion it was a very fun game but I do wish I did stop and had a drink.
Marking my story!
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Ideas
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Structure and Language
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Organisation
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Vocabulary
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Sentence Structure
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Spelling
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Punctuation
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R4
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R4
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R4
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R4
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R5
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R5
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R5
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Total score (add the numbers next to the R’s altogether)
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31
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4B
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Good story Edith.
ReplyDeleteYour goal for tomorrow is to explain your ideas more - for example. After "It was quite a sunny day so I already knew I was going to get hot like a pepper." You could add something like, the sun was shining down on us, and as soon as we started running, we started to sweat. The sweat dripped down our faces like a river.
I also want you to use more difficult words.
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ReplyDeleteGreat work Edith I love your story your alway filled with great and amazing idea. KEEP IT UP Edith you can do it and I know you will pass your goal that Miss Ashley told you are the best.
ReplyDeleteGreat work and I like the way you said humble winners and gracious losers
ReplyDeleteGOOD JOB.