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Tuesday, 14 March 2017

Writing on Monday VS Editing on Tuesday: WALT to self check our story using a rubric.

Writing on Monday.
The MAGIC box!!

Today we all were blindfolded and had to seek the object in the magic box.
It was then my turn, I was very excited because I felt like a pirate digging for treasure, but then my nervousness rose up and the daydream turned in a nightmare, My hand started to get eaten by an ALLIGATOR.

The blind was covering my face. I really thought I was gonna get a hard one but it ended up being a hard object with an square up top and  tube shape down the bottom. At the end there was also a circular hole with a price tag. This object also had pointy sticks on the base aiming up which also  felt like little knives stabbing me,.This object also had a convex back.

The object I turned to have was a… BRUSH. Once I figured it out I sat back down and continued with the show.

I hope we can do it again but this time with… SLIME.

Writing on Tuesday.
Sentence starters to use:
  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as
Did I remember to include….
Title
Introduction
Who, what, when, where, why, who, how
3 paragraphs - burger model
Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
Specific adjectives
Simile/Metaphor
Different punctuation
Short sentence for effect
Correct spelling throughout the story
A sentence you have added in editing
A sentence you have moved in editing
Sentence starters given

The MAGIC box!!!

Yesterday room 7 were all blindfolded in class and had to seek the object in the magic box. You had to put your hand in a box Miss Ashley made out or a coca cola box. I was like a kangaroo jumping up and down with excitement.

Excuse me room 7 this is a game called the magic box.” Miss ashley complied. “ We shall start off with Syraia-lee. During this game I will write what you are feeling on the board.” “EWW” Syraia - lee announced feeling disgusted, as we carried on with the game (Everyone started giggle since it was so disgusting. “HEHE”.

It was then my turn, I was very excited because I felt like a pirate digging for treasure, but once I stood my heart and brain was making me believe that , My hand started to get eaten by an ALLIGATOR.

The blind was covering my face as if the world turned pitch black. I really thought I was gonna get a hard one but it ended up being a hard object with an square up top and  tube shape down the bottom. At the end there was also a circular hole with a price tag. This object also had pointy sticks on the base aiming up which also  felt like little knives stabbing me, This object also had a convex back.

The object I turned to have was a BRUSH. Once I figured it out I continued with the show and sat down.

I hope we can do it again but this time with SLIME.



1 comment:

  1. I Love your work Edith..:) Good Job:P
    Keep the work up..:)

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